7th Descriptive Details/ Vivid Words
43. Alex composed the following sentence for a biography he is writing.
Arthritis made Oseola McCarty stop making a living by laundering clothes.
Alex wants to replace this sentence with a sentence that includes more descriptive details.
Which of the following sentences will he use as a replacement?
A. Before her arthritic hands interfered, Oseola McCarty washed and ironed clothes for a living.
B. Oseola McCarty made her living washing and ironing clothes until arthritis damaged her hands.
C. Oseola McCarty washed and ironed clothes for a living until her hands became filled with arthritis.
D. Her hands, drawn and twisted from painful arthritis, forced Osceola McCarty to retire from washing and ironing clothes.
Read the following video narrative Juanita wrote about her class trip. Then answer questions 60– 61 based upon this narrative.
(1) Everyone had looked forward to last year’s trip to Jekyll Island. (2) All of the seventh graders were prepared for three days of learning and fun. (3) We ended up with equal doses of each. (4) We spent one afternoon kayaking in the saltwater marshes. (5) We stayed in cabins each night and spent our days on the beach. (6) We explored beach ecology and learned about erosion. (7) At the end of each day, we were exhausted from hours in the sun; yet we were always eager to go back to the beach when morning came. (8) Next year I hope we are able to go to the mountains for our class trip.
60. Juanita wants to replace sentence 7 with a sentence that contains vivid word choice.
Which of the following sentences will she use as a replacement?
F. Exhausted from hours in the burning sun, we crawled under cool sheets at the end of each day; yet we raced to the beach as the sun peeked over the horizon.
G. When each day ended, we felt exhausted from hours in the hot sun; yet we eagerly went back to the beach as soon as the morning light reached our eyes.
H. We always ended each day exhausted from our long hours in the sun, yet we were always really excited to go back to the beach long before the morning sunrise.
J. Each day left us really exhausted from the many hours that we spent in the sun, yet we always jumped at the chance to hit the beach at first light.
61. Which of the following can Juanita add to the paragraph as supporting detail?
A. We had dinner each evening in a building in the center of the ring of cabins.
B. My favorite part of the trip was when I found a horseshoe crab that had washed up on the beach.
C. We visited the Georgia Sea Turtle Center, where we learned about the endangered loggerhead sea turtles.
D. The hot sun caused some people in our class to get sunburned because they did not wear clothes that would protect their skin.
64. Maria is writing a paragraph about a recent concert she attended. She has written that the building was crowded, the music was loud, and the people were lively. Maria is looking for details to describe the scene.
Which of the following is a descriptive detail Maria will incorporate into her paragraph?
F. The music was particularly upbeat and fast.
G. The music sounded exactly like the band’s latest released CD.
H. The music was overwhelming and could be heard in the last row.
J. The music echoed as a powerful combination of guitar, drums, and voice.
75. Read the following sentence.
The area around the campground was pleasant to see.
Which of the following replacements for this sentence includes descriptive detail?
A. The peaceful campground was the perfect spot for a summer vacation.
B. The stately pine trees stood like tall soldiers guarding the campground.
C. The natural beauty of the area made the campground a wonderful location.
D. The campground appeared to provide a tranquil escape from everyday life.
78. Read the following sentences Beth wrote to describe the display she saw in a store window.
Every inch of space was covered in red, white, and blue. American flags, evenly spaced, hung from straight sticks topped by gold stars. An enormous figure of Uncle Sam sat smiling from the top of a bright blue ladder that held copies of famous American documents on each rung. In each corner giant red firecrackers appeared to explode with sparkling glitter. The Fourth of July display was very beautiful.
Which of the following phrases uses descriptive detail more appropriate for the closing statement than was very beautiful?
F. looked amazing with the colors and authentic display of the celebration
G. caught my attention with the many emblems of the holiday
H. made me stop and stare at the colorful documents of the display indicating the holiday at hand
J. sprayed color across the window with familiar images and symbols of the day